This pitch good be good if you make some changes. The ending of it isn't appealing to the audience. The fact he goes to kill the person who's in debt isn't going to benefit the killer because he still wouldn't get his money. you may need to make these minor changes n after that i think this is an excellent pitch.
This could be an excellent and atmospheric opening. I like the idea of the character in church. You could have some very dramatic music and shots of his eyes, edited together with flashes of action from the events leaving up to this point - you could reach a climax and then cut away to the "beginning" of the story.
I really like that idea also the genre seems to be very clear aswell. The Pitch was presented clearly. Hope the whole story comes out as planned.
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This pitch good be good if you make some changes. The ending of it isn't appealing to the audience. The fact he goes to kill the person who's in debt isn't going to benefit the killer because he still wouldn't get his money. you may need to make these minor changes n after that i think this is an excellent pitch.
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This could be an excellent and atmospheric opening. I like the idea of the character in church. You could have some very dramatic music and shots of his eyes, edited together with flashes of action from the events leaving up to this point - you could reach a climax and then cut away to the "beginning" of the story.
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