The first thing you see is a black screen of credits running for about 25 seconds. The music in the background will be a piano playing until the credits and title disappear. The credits will consist of the characters of the film and the people who contributed to the making of the film, after the credits, the title will appear zooming out of the screen while the screen fades in with a smooth transition to a close up of the main character, Jason. He has a squint in his eyes as if he is looking into a bright light. The camera zooms out, to establish the setting of the place that he is in, he is in a dark basement and the only source of light is the bright torch which is attached to the gun pointing towards him. A bust shot of Jason tied up in a chair is shown, he says “where is my father?!” in anger. The masked man who is a robber says “Don’t worry, he’ll be fine, just as long as you tell me the code for the safe” in a relaxed tone while the camera is still on Jason. A side view shit of Jason is shown while he screams “Never! Those are my grandfather’s jewels, and you are not getting your filthy hands on them!” A sound of a gun being cocked is heard. Fast cuts are then shown of a close up of the gun, then a close up of Jason’s face, then a close up of the robber, all in quick succession to give a sense of chaos and urgency. Each shot in the fast cuts have a drum sound over them, then the screen goes blank simultaneously with the last beat of the drum sound.
Azmains pithch is good and will catch the audiences attention.The opening is interesting, however i think that 25secs of a black screen may be too long and can make the audience loose interest, especially because it is the opening so we wouldn't want to keep the audiences waiting.
ReplyDeleteYasmin xx
The pitch is really good and Azmain explains the camera shots/sound really well. The filming may be tricky and abit too long. Because the filming contains a gun it might make people think there is really something funny going on depending on where it is filmed. Overall its really good.
ReplyDeleteNikhat
Azmain ur pitch is very good, I find your idea of your pitch very intresting and could catch the audience eye as soon as they see the guy in the chair because they would want to know the suspense of what is going to happen next.However, i think whats in the safe should be more valuable so it is actually life threating that the robbers maay have to kill him and his father. I like the number of camera shots being used to show the tension and sweat of the situation and the use of sound.
ReplyDeleteStacey :)
Azmain, your pitch is clearly planned out which makes me as a audience want to actually see it in action. It appears to be triller jus by the camera shots and sounds you have included in you pitch.
ReplyDeleteSelysia x
Your pitch is good and really well presented. The story is very exciting and keeps the audience captivated. The genre, action/thriller came across very well with the camera shots and music you described.
ReplyDeleteLouise Cleaver (Media Dons)
You pitch is really good and clearly planned and i can see myself watching it. The only other thing you might want to consider is keeping what's in the safe a secret making the audience watch on to find out what's inside. otherwise, good pitch :)
ReplyDeleteFarjana R
I think that your pitch is exciting and will appeal to the audience. Make sure add some audio to create tension. Overall i thibk that this would be a good opening.
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